[damien]

[style= text-align: center; text-transform: uppercase;]DAMIEN CYRIUS HAWTHORNE

This application is currently complete. My name is Shay and I'm 26 years old. I was awesome and read the rules, so I know that the secret phrase is the better to see you with, my dear.

THE BASICS

NAME: Damien Cyrius Hawthorne
AGE: 300 (looks 60)
GENDER: Male
BIRTHDAY: August 13
RACE: Human (arcanist | warlock)
OCCUPATION: Dragon Rider
CLASS: Eldest (Grandmaster) Noble - Upper Class
POWER: Manipulation [special]- He can manipulate energy to form elements and objects of an assortment of sizes.
PLAYBY: Jeromy Irons

THE RELATIONS

GUARDIAN RIDER: Quen Xerys.
MOTHER: Samara Hawthorne
FATHER Levius Hawthorne
BROTHERS: Orrin Hawthorne
SISTERS: None
CHILDREN: None
EXTENDED FAMILY: Unknown at this time
PETS: Falcon named Zypheris (used for messages)

THE APPEARANCE

Damien is an older looking man. He stands about 6' foot in height. Build wise he is well toned and his skin is fair. Has dark shaggy hair that is well kept. His face his worn in look due to years of experience, with a beard. He has oval shaped lunar grey eyes. Clothing wise he tends to wear lots of leather and lightweight chain mail given to him. Often he has a very laid back stance.

THE PERSONALITY

Hardened by the years of being a born arcanist and eventual rider; Damien is a hard man to get through to the kindness of, except for children they can get to him every time. He's not mean, just strict on things. He defines his life on rules and codes for the better of the realm and of the riders. To try and derail him from that would be impossible. A great warrior, his services to the realm are well deserved. He's loyal to the idea of order and peace. He does have some things he enjoys though when not on duty. Ale, woman, and the occasional contest was something he enjoyed.

Damien likes to drink a lot. So often he could be found at the pubs in any city he visits. Just because he looks older does not mean he can't look. Nor does that not mean he still couldn't bed with someone. Damien has always wanted children. However, having time to have them has been a hard road while being a rider.

On the opposing spectrum he doesn't like chaos. Chaos give him migraines which makes him angry. Disobedience from those learning drives him nuts too. Anyone coming to be a rider must be there to ride and not goof off. His biggest pet peeve is being called "old man". Call him old man and you may find a good boot up your bum. Damien also does not tolerate dark riders. Those that misuse being one with the dragon.

Because Damien was first and foremost born with magic, he knows how to use it. However, he knows the consequences of using it and urge those that have it to be very careful on using it themselves. Being of noble blood, Damien learned the fine art of melee from his father who was a noble warrior of the realm. Riding has been a natural thing for Damien since a young boy be it from horse and moving on to dragon. Over the years Damien has gain wisdom, which he deems more important than the intellect of academics. Loyalty is at the core of his persona, he is loyal to those he cares about until the end. Compassion is something he can share, but one has to see past the grumpy old manness to see it.

Damien has an awful temper if he is drunk or if someone pisses him off. Never cross a Hawthorne. Just because he is a rider doesn't mean that his age doesn't show. He just doesn't like admitting to it. Again ale and woman hold factor as a weakness as well as a like. Ale drowns out the pains of life. While the woman pleasurize it.

His dreams are helping to lead great riders to a good future. Help sustain the place where the riders are trained. Eventually get a break so he can relax a bit. On the other hand he fears dying alone, before time, or dishonorably, riders turning on the riders, and never having children.

THE HISTORY

BIRTH REALM: Mourinor
BIRTH KINGDOM: Van'ostgar

Damien was born to Samara and Levius Hawthorne in the kingdom of Van'otgar. Born parents were arcanist, so he grew up knowing magic. However, his father had not known that his mother had been arcane too or they would of never married due to that very reason, two arcanists couldn't wed due to law. Otherwise Damien's father loved his mother dearly. As much as Damien was born to a magical family, he was also born to noble family of great respect. He learned the art of swordplay and also the art of fighting with ones two fists. His father who was a great knight and noble himself, taught him everything there was to know about being a fighter from the age of 2. Both parents had magic, but never flaunted their association with it, nor was it ever seen being used. However, the mother believed magic was a blessing, not a curse, and pledged to teach their sons the use of magic under her watchful eyes, yet also praying that their sons would not be taken from them for teaching because teaching was treason, a sin, and punishable by death. Four years later his brother Orrin was born. This left Damien someone to teach the lessons he learned from their father. He loved both of his parents much, especially his mothers cooking.

As he and his brother got older they began to fight better and better against each other, until they were able to sword fight their way around the barn next to their noble home top to bottom. They always sparred, even if it meant shirking of their duties as nobles. Their parents said they always acted more like farmers over noble boys. Both boys continued to learn magic, learning how to use it in day to day life and in battle, however it was their mother that supported this over the father. Their father was a respectable noble, he couldn't have his children continuing magic, they were supposed to be nobles, human, yet their mother believe that knowledge was power over sword any day. Magic was forbidden, considered a sin in their land. So their father made sure that they never practiced at home and often punished them for doing so. The boys however, were not up for restrictions, continuing elsewhere instead, yet they knew they had to try to keep it inside the family so their parents wouldn't lose them. So for their parents sake they were very clever about trying to hide it away and doing it where no one would know. Yet eventually all good things come to an end.

Damien and Orrin used going hunting often as an excuse, bringing home real kills to throw off the trail of what they were up to. This was where they spent most of their time practicing magic, away from populated eyes. However, mistakes can always be made. It was on one of these hunting sessions that they were caught by accident. It had been raining that day and both had wanted shelter from the rain so they had used magic to create a make shift shelter. Curious, the person that had saw them had luckily been Damien's future guardian Quen Xyris. The boys on the other hand figured if they ran across a bear they would just try and scare it off, that or be scared off themselves. Luckily there was no bear, but both boys had felt uneasy about being out there, as if they were being watched and eventually traveled home, game-less. The meeting of Quen was a miracle for Damien. Quen had followed the boys back to their place and had finally confronted the family about the boys' use of magic. However, originally that had not been what Quen had been originally traveling for. The Guardian rider had, had an egg on him and with Damien and his brother Orrin's curiosity getting the better of both boys, had snooped while they parents had been talking. Finding the egg, the boys spent time with it while the Guardian discussed with their parents how the boys should keep their magic in check before some Arcane city guards came and took them both off elsewhere. The dragon had hatched that day for Damien alone.

For a time that was an exciting venture. However, he eventually learned there was more to life than just raising a dragon. He became a dragon rider, learning first at home with his parents on how to take care of the dragon and eventually his departure to take on further learning else where. His brother on the other hand went to traveling and as far as he knew became a pirate, still on the lust for wealth and power, but not in a bad way just his way. His parents had taken both boys leaving heavily, but had continued to live on a quite life without their sons.

After taking an oath to his dragon Aeon and bonding with it, he has become a rider over fighter, a defender of the realm. He was taught by a great teacher named Quen Xerys until he left the kingdom of Van'otgar. Growing up with the riders was a life that seemed to go by too fast. As a brash younger man he took to being a dragon rider more foolishly, however, as he got older he learned that being a rider meant so much more. It meant responsibility, justice, courage, code. Of course Damien intended to visit years after his initial training, but once he had gotten the chance, he had found both parents gone. Either because of death or because of just missing, he had no idea on his end what had happened. However he had tried to find answers with no leads. A conclusion Damien had come to was that one or both of his parents were found out to of been Arcanists themselves, that they had children, and because of it, had been taken away by the guards of the Arcane city for treason. The boys had only gotten lucky because of Quen, which Damien had thanked him for before the man had died. Damien had respected the mans open values, beliefs, and ways. The old guardian had taught him everything he had known including to stand up for what was right. Quen had told him on his death bed that the man had been the best student he had ever seen or had and had been privileged to of taught such a worthy man to become a rider. Today though he knows that they probably are dead, his resolved to finding out what had happened to them still undetermined. The one thing he hopes is that maybe, some way, his brother might be still alive out there, and still scouring the countryside for fame and fortune. Now, Damien helps lead the future riders. Each rider that comes before him is taught the ways of what it means to be a rider and a guardian of the realm.

THE DRAGON

NAME: Aeon
AGE: 282 years
GENDER: Male
COLOR: White

GUARDIAN DRAGON: Faelyx
MOTHER: Markaedys
FATHER: Atana
SIBLINGS: Wystra, Atrix, Moryth, Vex

PERSONALITY:
Also hardened by the years of being a riders dragon; Aeon is a difficult dragon to get through to the kindness of, except for hatchlings they can get to him every time. He's not mean, just strict on things like Damien is. He to defines his life on rules and codes for the better of the realm and of the riders as well as his kin. To try and derail him or his rider from that would be impossible. A great warrior, his services to the realm are well deserved. He with Damien is loyal to the idea of order and peace. He does have some things he enjoys though when not on duty. Ale, Dames (female dragons), and contest was something he shared as an enjoyment.

However, Aeon does not drink heavily like Damien does. Yet Aeon is found often following his rider to pubs in any city he visits. Just because he's and older dragon doesn't mean squat in relationships. Nor does that not mean he still couldn't bed with someone as well. Aeon has wanted hatchlings but not as badly as Damien wants children. So he feels he has time to wait on that.

On the opposing spectrum he like Damien doesn't like chaos. Chaos give him migraines which makes him angry. Disobedience from those learning drives him nuts too. Anyone coming to be a rider or a dragons serving for a rider must be there to ride and not goof off. His biggest pet peeve is high pitch noises. They hurt his sensitive ears.. Aeon also does not tolerate dark dragons or riders. Those that misuse being one with each other.

His dreams are helping to lead great riders to a good future. Help sustain the place where the riders are trained. Eventually meet a female. On the other hand he fears dying alone without his rider, before time, or dishonorably, riders turning on the riders, and seeing the world fall to ruin.

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[Mercy Scarborough]

A few things before he can be accepted:

-There's no need to include telepathy under Damien's power. Because he's a dragon rider, it is automatically known that he has this connection with his dragon. Also, all you need under power is "energy manipulation." The rest of it doesn't quite seem relevant, like: "Because Damien is a skilled magical and in the rider arts," especially.

-For his age, just put down 300 and, if you like, how old he appears. The rest is information that should be in history or personality instead.

-Under Guardian Rider, you just need the name of the rider. It doesn't matter if he is currently under the care of a guardian or not.

-Arcanists who further their powers beyond their natural power are known as mages, but you refer to him as a magician and, in one place, a sorcerer. Also, the arcane arts are hereditary, so if the boys have powers, someone in their family would have been an arcanist as well. If I were you, I would just read over the magic thread again.

-Acquiring a dragon egg in Mourinor is not like finding one in Faeryn. The process is explained in the Dragon info thread. An egg is not simply found, it is guarded by the guardian rider and dragon who watch after the egg until the find the one who it hatches for. Then, the guardians stay with the new rider and hatchling and train them until they are ready to travel to Elsweyr.

-Van'ostgar is a kingdom, not a city.

-Your history is very lacking. It's likely that someone would have noticed these boys had powers considering they were born with them and it just looks as though his parents dropped off the face of the earth once he became a dragon rider.

[damien]

Okay I tried to fix what you listed to the best of my ability. Knowing myself I might of gotten confused on some things still but I really am trying. I added more detail to the history and that about the parents and even a bit more about the guardian who trained him. I hope it helps. If there is anything else i need let me know.

[Mercy Scarborough]

Just a few minor details now.

-The following part of the history doesn't quite fit: "the boys should keep their magic in check before some Arcanists came and took them both off elsewhere." Arcanists wouldn't have come, guards of the Arcane city would have taken them off.

-The following doesn't make sense: "A conclusion Damien had come to was that his parents were found out to of been Arcanists themselves and had had children because of it."

-He can be born an arcanist, but not a mage. An arcanist is just someone who has a power. A mage is someone who has furthered their magical abilities beyond those of their natural arcane ability. A warlock is a mage who is also trained in combat. He has to learn to become a mage.

-Other than grammar mistakes and wording, which I'm not as strict on, the only other thing I would like changed about the history is how they managed to avoid being sent to the Arcane City of Van'ostgar. You say that they were careful, but that's really it. What might stress it even more would be if you said right away that Arcanism was a sin in Mourinor. I think what I'm trying to say here is that his parents seem to take it too lightly. Becoming a mage is a dangerous thing in Mourinor and yet they taught their young children how to further their magic? Maybe one of the parents could have been against it?

[damien]

I found some of the grammar errors but I doubt I found them all. And I tried to explain it better......somehow it always comes out better in my head over what I put down on the computer......hope that gets what you put.....